文档介绍：2000年高考英语书面表达优秀文章点评
二、内容要点: 1. 时间:2000年2月8日早晨7点15分; 2. 地点:公园路公园门前; 3. 我正沿公园路向东走; 4. 一辆汽车从第3街向右拐,驶入公园路时撞倒了一位过街的老人; 5. 汽车未停,沿公园路向西开走; 6. 汽车是黄色的,车牌号是AC864,司机是一位女性。
各档次的给分范围和要求:满分 25分 第五档:(21—25分)能写明全部或绝大部分要点;句型有变化,语言基本无误,行文连贯,表达清楚。 第四档:(16—20分)能写明全部或绝大部分要点;语言有少量错误;但行文基本连贯,表达基本清楚。 第三档:(11—15分)能写明基本要点;语言虽有较多错误,尚能达意。 第二档:(6—10分)能写出部分要点;语言错误多,影响意思表达。 第一档:(1—5分)只能写出与所要求内容有关的一些单词或一、两个要点;语言错误很多,只有个别句子可懂。 四、说明: 1. 内容要点可用不同方式表达。 2. 对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分。
范文: It was 7:15 on the morning of February 8, 2000. I was walking along Park Road towards the east when an elderly man came out of the park on the other side of the street. Then I saw a yellow car drive up Third Street and make a right turn into Park Road. The next moment the car hit the man while he was crossing the road. He fell with a cry. The car didn’t stop but drove off at great speed heading west. I noticed the driver was a young woman and the plate number was AC864. About two minutes later I stopped a passing car and took the old man to the nearest hospital.
Li Hua
(以2000年高考题为例)
假设你是李华,在美国探亲。2000年2月8日清晨,你
目击一起交通事故。警察局让你写一份材料,报告当时
所见情况。请根据下列图画写出报告。
Picture 1: an old man walked out of the park.
Picture 2: a car turned right and ran towards him.
Picture 3: the car knocked down the old man.
Picture 4: the driver drove away.
What is each picture about? Please write it down using one simple sentence.
It was 7:15 on the morning of February 8, 2000. I was walking along Park Road towards the east when an elderly man came out of the City Park on the other side of the street.
I saw a yellow car drive up third Street and make a right turn into Park Road.
The car hit the man while he was crossing the road. He fell with a cry.
The car didn’t stop but drove off at great speed heading west. I noticed the driver was a young woman and the plate number was AC864.
Right at that moment,
To my surprise/What’s worse,
Before we realized it,
It was on the morning of Feb 8th, 2000 that the accident happened. When I was walkin