文档介绍：高三开放性作文评析
开放性作文结构
①描图
②析图
③议图+升华主题
何时思考立意?
同学们的立意:
protect/love children
helping others
wife orders
no aim in life, keep pet to kill time
no time with friends, pet shouldn’t be god
say “thank you” to the dog
protection umbrella
stubborn, change thoughts, how will
you hold the umbrella?
同学们的立意:
dog /man not happy
self first, pet second
exposed to rain, essfully go ahead
different way to deal with problem
hobby affect your future
treat each other equally
not give up social life for pets
man stronger, give protection to disabled
love pet, ignore family
dog is like god
怎样审图?
①按照“5W1H”的思路去展开,
即what, who, why, when, where, how
②反复追问why, why, why,积极立意
. Why does the artist draw a picture
like that?
Why is the man holding the umbrella
for the dog?
Why does the man love the dog so much?
社会主流价值观:
(符合全民族需要,具有广泛号召力)
爱国、奉献、和谐、
创新、环保、民主…
As we can see in the picture, it’s raining
very hard. The elderly man is holding his
umbrella to protect his beloved pet dog
from the rain, while he himself is walking
in the rain.
This kind of phenomenon is not unusual
in our society. Many elderly folks are living
in loneliness. Their children are not around
them, and so their pet is the only family
they have to whom they can show their full
attention.
范文版
This cartoon attempts to convey the
message that everyone, as a member of
society, should care more about the elderly.
We could make a difference in their lives,
for instance, by showing more respect and
concern about their mental and spiritual
well-being.
范文版
As is shown in the picture, a man with a
small hat is holding an umbrella for his pet
dog in the rain to prevent it from getting
wet, while he himself is already drenched.
The man looks sad in tears, yet the dog seem
to be arrogant and unsatisfied.
Ridiculous as the picture conveys, it still
indicates a phenomenon in our daily life.
Our parents happen to be the man in
sorrow, and we take the role as the “pet
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