文档介绍：PERSONAL STATEMENT
By Shi Yuntian
这篇文章的作者出生于贫苦家庭,通过自己的奋斗取得了相当不错的成绩。他的起点较低,条件较一般人更为困难,而国外的学校比较重视通过自己的努力所取得的成果,因此像这种情况值得多费一些笔墨来描述。但不要简单的哭穷,而要表现自己如何克服重重困难取得成就。
In connection with my application for acceptance into your . program. I am enclosing the following statement concerning my hard life, professional activities, and tentative future plans.(这句话出现在很多Personal statement中,显然是从某一本范例上原样照搬下来的,但是实际上并不是很好,关于其中的缺陷可以参看第一篇范例--"失之泛泛言之无物"中的介绍。)
I am from a poor family.(这句话过于平直,作为段首句应当提纲挈领,讲出本段的主要意思,让人有一个基本的概念,然后再围绕这句话展开,效果比平铺直叙要好得多。把中心句放在句首是个好习惯,能一下子抓住读者的思维,使他在短时间内留下深刻的印象,这在写作Statement时是一个很有用的技巧。) When I studied in Junior Middle School, my elder brother and sister were reading . degree. Although my parents worked day in and day out, they still could not afford our fee. Therefore, I graduated from Junior Middle School in 1986, and received the highest score in my school at The County Entrance Examination for Senior Middle School,(外国人不一定知道Country Entrance Examination是什么,有什么地位,因此像这种考试可以作一简要介绍,但不能瞎吹,华而不实反而效果不好。关于Highest Score的问题,前面也说过,中国学生喜欢将自己历来各项高分罗列一番,而实际上也要视情况而定。有所取舍,避免给人留下自吹自擂的印象。) but my parents declined my requirement to study in the topmost high school at provincial level, and let me study in technical college because it waived my fee.
Upon acceptance to Changsha Nonferrous Metal College, my major became geology. I spent most of my time in studying and plete, profound, and