文档介绍：PERSONAL STATEMENT
Ye Yingli
很多中国留学申请者在自述中写个小故事。整理得好的话,这种小故事会让人感到亲切真实。但绝大多数情况下,中国学员要么没有找到很好的故事,要么有好故事也讲不出来。本篇原文有一个关于邻居的故事,本来也不错,但离文章的主题太远了些。修改稿中把关于邻居的故事取消了,但强调了抚养弟妹的事实。这样一改,文章变得更紧凑和更有说服力。
A doctor on the formidable plateau in China's Qinghai Province, I have been hankering for graduate studies for almost ten years. The wish has had to be buried until now because I, as the oldest child of a poor family, needed to work, and work hard, to put my brother and sister through all their education. With my duties of the first born finally discharged, I would now like to start pursuing my own dream, a big part of which is to obtain a . degree in a quality medical school in the United States.
Born into a small village in the mountainous Guizhou Province, I went to the Lanzhou Medical University, the leading medical school in the country's Northwest, on the strength of my outstanding scores in the 1984 National University Entrance Examinations. To build up a solid foundation for my career, I concentrated my studies on the courses of my major, achieving an academic record that was one of the best in the university at the time. My GPA ranked me among the top five per cent of the 350 students in my grade in the first three years and the top two per cent in the last two years.
My strong academic performance won me honors and scholarships every year during the five years of my underg