2012广州调研作文讲评.ppt

文档介绍：作文讲评
2012广州调研考试
小作文
进步:
1. 信息整合比较好
2. 语言表达有提高(长句子)
3. 文章连贯性增加
存在问题:
审题(时态)
长句的逻辑性
词的适当形式、近义词混淆
Step 1: 读题、审题+信息整合
主题
首届全国中学生“春晚”
--- “轮到我们了”
组织者
一群广州中学生
时间
2012年1月15日,节目时长180分钟
内容
学生喜欢的各种节目,如街舞等。
特色
、自导、自演; 。
目的
; 。
一般将来时/一般现在时; 第三人称
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Step 2: 翻译信息点 Step 3 : 连词成句
首届全国中学生“春晚”--- “轮到我们了”(主题)
(组织者) 一群广州中学生
A group of students from Guangzhou plan/is going to/decide to anize the first National Middle School Students’ Spring Festival Show with the theme of “It’s Our Turn”/whose theme is “It’s Our Turn”/of which the theme is “It’s Our Turn”.
The first National Middle School Students’ Spring Festival Show with the theme of “It’s Our Turn”/whose theme is “It’s Our Turn”/of which the theme is “It’s Our Turn” anized by a group of students from Guangzhou.
2012年1月15日
… will be held by… on January 15th,2012.
2012年1月15日,节目时长180分钟
The show will be held on January 15th, 2012 and will last as long as 180 minutes.
The show, which will last 180 minutes, will be held on Jan. 15th, 2012.
学生喜欢的各种节目,如街舞等。
There will be various performances the students themselves like/are fond of like/such as/including street dance and acting out plays.
Students will give/put on all kinds of performances the students themselves are fond of, like the street dance.
The 180-minute-long show will include a great variety of performan